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Opening Sentences that Sell
Dit is een artikel afkomstig van de site PromotionBase.com. Helaas is deze site verdwenen. Het artikel bevat een uitgebreide handleiding met daarin het doel van een goede opening, diverse schrijftechnieken en voorbeelden van goede openingszinnen.
Opening Sentences that Sell
Ok, now that we've written our headline, let's develop the opening paragraph for our email communication.
As you'll recall, we're writing an email to a targeted audience -- customers of HealthyBods.com health club -- to sell them the spammiest product of all -- herbal Viagra. As we saw last week, to break through the email clutter and get a recipient's attention for a product like this is difficult -- but it can be done.
Today, we'll write our opening paragraph. To kick off, let's look at what we'll have to achieve with our opener. Then we'll look at some opening paragraphs from a few spam emails that have arrived in my inbox recently, and see what we think of them. Using the information we glean from this, we'll write our opener.
The Challenge: Usage Situation
The situation in which our user finds themselves when they open our email will be critical to how they receive the correspondence. The HealthyBods.com recipients might receive the email at work, at home, on their pda -- anywhere. A business-oriented mailer might be more convinced that their mailing list contained largely work email addresses, but HealthyBods.com could have either work or recreational addresses on their list.
This means that recipients could be under any number of pressures while they're wading through their inbox and (hopefully) reading the HealthyBods.com email:
While we don't know what they'll be doing, we can be fairly sure that at least some recipients are likely to be multi-tasking online (as many people do when reading email).
This means one thing: our email opener has to have considerable power, and a giant hook, if it is to take the reader's attention away from everything else they're engaged with at that moment.
The power comes from the language we'll use and the structure of the communication itself.
The size and impact of the hook will depend on the benefit we base the communication upon, and how well we communicate the importance of this benefit to the HealthyBods.com clients.
Let's Try Some Spam
Let's look at a few openers from some spam I've received recently, and see how they shape up against the power and hook requirements we talked about above.
The first thing that appears in this email is the code at the top -- not a great way to kick off an email from the reader's point of view. And I don't know about you, but I had to read the opening sentence more than once before I grasped it:
I'm bored with this email by the end of the first sentence, not to mention annoyed by its typos.
So what might a better message be? What about:
Invest in your future!
Smoother, sharper, and a lot more powerful. Next: a Viagra spam!
Again, more typos (I think we can safely make 'spellcheck' a golden rule of promotional email). This email also starts with an ID code which doesn't exactly inspire reader confidence.
The bullet point form of this email makes it easier to comprehend, but at the same time, the fact that each point is written in 'Title Case' negates the impact of this style.
But look at the message. The 'benefit' is the order process: 'Avoid embarrassing doctor's appointments!' boasts the email a little later. While this may not appeal to our health-conscious HealthyBods.com recipients, it might appeal to a different target audience.
The message is clear, and well-communicated, but the maintenance of brand integrity (which HealthyBods.com will want to ensure) is obviously not a priority with this email.
Bron: PromotionBase.com (deze site is helaas verdwenen, deze pagina is een mirror ter behoud van de info)
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